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06-19-2008, 14:22:06
This thread has been created after the model of the Story Reviews thread in the GamersHood Planet Subforum.

Here you can give feedback to stories that are written by members that have nothing to do with our GamersHood characters.

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Make sure you express your feedback in a respectful manner. :)

06-19-2008, 15:27:19

It's a good start. However, I didn't think it was flowing the way it should and it felt like you were repeating yourself. Still I'm exited to see what you'll make of this :)

06-19-2008, 15:28:36
Yes. Remember, it's only a start. As I make more the story should/will flow into a nice story.

06-19-2008, 17:07:54
that sounds really good man! i cant wait untill the other chapters come out!!!! :D:D:D:D good job !

06-19-2008, 17:13:20
If you want you can help. If you want to help pm me and we can set up some details.

07-03-2008, 15:12:17
Just read Elni's stories :D Great! :appl: I really like mythology, so the first one was perfect for me, and I'm also really exited do find out how GH really was made! ^^
Rock on, Chicken!

07-03-2008, 15:17:43
Thank you Simple :$ I hope you like the other part as well. I finish it probably today or tomorrow :D

07-03-2008, 15:42:59
Looking forward to it!

07-03-2008, 18:15:24
Ooh! I wanna know what happens at 7 pm!? :D Well done dear Elni! :D Well done. Looking forward to more. :hug2:

07-03-2008, 19:07:17
Yay new story for me.

07-03-2008, 20:28:01
I really wanna know what's inside of that box, Elni :o :o :o

07-03-2008, 21:29:20
Wow, that's a great story idea! :D
Great chapters so far Elni! :)
I had to giggle about Larry, the turtle :haha:

And as Crazy, I'm also very curious to know what's inside the box :D

07-03-2008, 23:47:54
OH! What a fun story :D Me wanna read more!
Thank you for posting, dear Elni :hug2:

07-07-2008, 23:11:42
I say that the story Death Wish is one of the best story's I have read so far.
It is awesome :D

07-08-2008, 18:26:51
OMB, that was such a funny and interesting chapter, I really liked it a lot :D :appl:
And I had to laugh after the last 2-3 sentences :haha:
Keep up good work on that story, I'm looking forward to reading what happens next :)

07-09-2008, 11:08:49
Thanks Mystery :D I just finished part 4 Hope you enjoy it :)

I have to say that Death Wish is a great story and I look forward for the next chapter. But now that I am looking I can't find the thread :| Mayby someone can help this chicken :shy:

07-09-2008, 17:04:06
Wow, what an interesting story, Elni :D
I really like it - and always when a chapter ends, I want to know what happens next :haha:

Sorry, Death Wish isn't available anymore.

07-09-2008, 19:59:44
I only just now read more of your story. :shy: I've been busy and was a bit behind. :shy: Me sorry. :$ Anyway, I love it! I found myself smilling and giggling at several parts! :haha: I loved how Mike teased Gam about the duck next door coming over to tease the turtle! :rofl-smilie: So funny. I'm really enjoying the story and looking forward to more. :D

07-09-2008, 20:38:47
Yay, I'm REALLY enjoying this story a lot :D :D :D
And I'm so excited to know how it's going to continue!

07-09-2008, 21:15:33
Thank you very much Lilli, Escape and Mistery :hug2: . I'll write the next part tomorrow as I have to go ashleep now (need to wake up at 5 a.m. :'( )

Edit: I just read the Haunted story and I find it very interesting :D it is like I am watching a movie

07-12-2008, 21:51:29
Wow, Elni :D I wonder who that girl is! Is she me? :P Jk.
This story's getting more and more interesting, and I hope you continue soon :D

07-12-2008, 23:13:14

I liked the new part of this story. It remineds me the saying: Curiosity killed the cat. I think I sleep with my lights open today :P

Thank you dear :hug2: I'll try to write another chapter soon. Infact I'll try it now (If I don't find my self playing any games :P )

07-12-2008, 23:33:11
Yay :D

Just a little tip, writer to writer: Try to find a balance between calling your character by his/her name and calling them by their pronoun :wink: It'll make the story flow better if you don't start every sentence with "Jeff" :P

07-12-2008, 23:36:23
Yeah I just noticed that. I would probably be doing better if I weren't half asleep and paying more attention to a game I'm playing. :P

Edit: fixed the story, it should be a little better now.

07-13-2008, 01:04:36
That was such a fun read. :) I love the creativity and imagination that went into the creation of this planet. ;) Loved reading each chapter. :D Thank you! :)

07-13-2008, 01:09:10
:haha: I read the word 'squirrel' and wen't "Oh my god!" before I scrolled down and saw my name :haha: Who is this 'Mike', Elni? I think I wanna get to know him :P
Anyways, great way to end the story! :D can't wait for the next one!

07-14-2008, 03:29:53
I like haunted :D

07-14-2008, 06:32:24
It was a good story. i liked the last part. please make more stories. i got an idea of what your next story will be but i rather let this up to you then saying mine because its your stories.

07-18-2008, 21:11:18
WOW your new chapter really made my heart bit faster. Please write the new chapter soon :D

Escape, Crazy and New Thank you for you kind words. I wasn't very happy with the end. It sound much better in my mind. The next story would be nicer :D

OW and New please tell me the topic of your story. I will ensure you you are going to be the idea person ;) How GH was created was Mandy's idea :). Infactg I just updated it in the first chapter :)

Sorry for the double posting I merged it :) I had to say that I liked the story someguy. I hope you get inspired for the next story. :D

07-18-2008, 21:34:19
Thanks Elni and any other fans of the story.
I need some new ideas, so if someone could give me an idea, that would be great.

07-18-2008, 21:35:48
I have an idea. How about to write for a mystery chest:?

07-18-2008, 21:40:57
A mystery chest?
and I'm asking that any ideas be fowarded to my pm box.

07-22-2008, 21:15:26
I read your new chapter. Very strange things are happening :P

08-09-2008, 17:25:10
i just read wot u dun, so far it's rlly good!! Every chapter has a cliff hanger, my fav part so far is in chapter 4 the description and the fight with the creatures is gr8!! when will there be the next chapter??

mojo xxx

09-14-2008, 00:55:13
I'm just reminding fans of my stories. I'm thinking of new ideas, but if you think you havwe a really good idea, pm me and I might use it.

09-15-2008, 02:53:59
Ok so I am an official fan.I like the gore,nd violence.Rock on.Can't wait for the next chapters,ps I NEVER read anything,but I am excited about this!!!!!!!!!!! :D

09-15-2008, 03:04:21
You should try reading it.

09-17-2008, 01:37:42
Ok just read chapter 2 of the takeover,nd I wanted to turn the page soooooooo bad,but there is no page t turn lol. I thought it was great!!!!! I was a lil confused in the begining of the chapter,but then I realized what was going on when I read more.So all in all I am really liking this story!!!!!!!!!!!

09-17-2008, 02:14:04
You read chapter 1 too?