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someguy
09-15-2008, 02:33:53
Warning! There will be violent content, may not be suitible for anyone under 10.

Update:
I have got wordpress to work here, so I will be continuing my story there. I will be able to write a little more freely, plus it's easier.

http://someguy112.wordpress.com/

feedback can be posted there or in this thread. I'm hoping to go 30 chapters, but that's if I have time.

Update: Chapter two is up. And when you look at the story, go from the bottom up. Chapter one starts at the bottom with the newer chapters at the top.

Justeazy
09-17-2008, 01:30:24
Ummm... I cannot find chapter 1... and I don't want to start on chapter 2...

someguy
09-17-2008, 01:32:56
Should be there. I'm checking the link now.

Justeazy
09-17-2008, 01:35:43
Nevermind. They go from bottom to top, not top to bottom like I would think.

Just didn't scroll down all the way... :haha:

someguy
09-17-2008, 01:40:07
Yeah, I'll stick that in the first post.

Justeazy
09-17-2008, 01:41:18
Okay, read it. I like it good enough, but it sounds like the style is copying mine a little, lol.

It is good nonetheless! I like how the action comes quickly and strongly, ;)

someguy
09-17-2008, 01:49:17
I decided to add the extra character, after reading yours. Hope you don't mind.
but I wrote my story first, so the action doesn't copy yours.

Justeazy
09-17-2008, 01:53:18
Hmmm... I'm not sure if you wrote it first... I've been writing mine for 4 months or so... well, now I just gotta type it all up, and finalize the parts I'm going to post (not going to post the whole story, :P)

But, no, I don't mind, I'm actually honored a little, :D:P)

someguy
09-17-2008, 01:54:59
Oh yay.

someguy
10-02-2008, 16:21:06
New chapter is up. Chapter 3.
Start at the bottom for chapter 1.

LovelyUndeadVam
10-02-2008, 23:37:38
"and quickly unlocked my door and got in. I started up the car and quickly" you should think about changing one to something other than quickly. ;) it sounds bad when you have the same describing words in sentences back to back. :)

someguy
10-02-2008, 23:41:31
ahh thanks,
and comments on if you like it or not?

LovelyUndeadVam
10-02-2008, 23:43:39
i'm not done yet, but it's really good so far. :)

someguy
10-02-2008, 23:46:24
Yay, thanks. If you find anything else that should be changed, send it to my pm box.

LovelyUndeadVam
10-02-2008, 23:48:11
i've finished it now. one word to describe it:

AWESOME!

someguy
10-02-2008, 23:50:24
So happy.
Think you could give more descriptive comments here on how awsome it is :P ?

LovelyUndeadVam
10-02-2008, 23:52:26
hahaha. it was VERY VERY awesome. like, i was reading it, but i couldn't stop! it was really action packed and there are only three chapters so far! i can't wait for the fourth chapter!

that in my opinion, is an awesome book. if i'm sitting here thinking "WHAT is going to HAPPEN?!" then it's an awesome book. :) i have VERY good taste in books.

someguy
10-02-2008, 23:55:24
Do you like how I kinda put in a cliffhanger at the end of the third chapter?

LovelyUndeadVam
10-02-2008, 23:57:59
well you're supposed to. ;) keeps the readers interested and going. althogh occasionally i like to make a chapter where you can stop and mark your place. that's just my writing style though. :) i'm not sure how you prefer to write.

someguy
10-03-2008, 00:04:34
Yeah. It was a good cliffhanger.
Kinda like, "OMG WHATS GING TO HAPPEN TO THEM!!!"

LovelyUndeadVam
10-03-2008, 00:16:34
seriously. :D

someguy
10-03-2008, 00:19:02
I'm working on Chapter 4.
Be anticipated.

LovelyUndeadVam
10-03-2008, 00:20:56
i'm not only anticipating it, i'm DYING for it! hurry, but don't make it sound rushed!

someguy
10-03-2008, 00:22:53
It won't I think I'll delay it just to torture you. :P

LovelyUndeadVam
10-03-2008, 00:23:15
:'( not nice!

someguy
10-03-2008, 01:12:43
Chapter 4 is up.

Justeazy
10-03-2008, 01:37:25
" more of them would here it,"
should be
" more of them would hear it,"

and, also
"if she got to cocky"
should be
"if she got too cocky"
(both in chapter 4)

I like the book tho!

someguy
10-03-2008, 21:55:56
Ah, thanks for catching that.
I'll change them.

It seems that every good writer makes some stupid mistakes sometimes. I can never seem to get away from that.

LovelyUndeadVam
10-03-2008, 23:56:49
"It seemes that it had taken..." that should be "seems" :)

"And when she saw them, she though" THAT should be thought. :D i'm treating this like i would if i were reading a printed and bound copy of it. hope you don't mind.

very very well done on that one! :appl: i'm anticipating the next chapter as i eat my awesome food. :haha:

someguy
10-04-2008, 00:01:17
oh yum.
I'll change that too.

LovelyUndeadVam
10-04-2008, 00:03:12
:D made by my favorite chef: CHEF BOYARDEE!!!! :haha:

:) okay.

someguy
10-04-2008, 00:05:41
Thanks for finding those typos.
And now, I'm asking that all typos you find in my story be sent to my PM inbox, where it will be easier to notice.

LovelyUndeadVam
10-04-2008, 00:16:24
okie dokie.

someguy
10-12-2008, 18:58:02
sorry for the delay everyone. I had a bit of a writers block, and now I'm brainstorming and writing out the next chapter.
so it might be a day or two before there is another chapter posted.

someguy
10-14-2008, 16:14:49
Chapter five is up.

LovelyUndeadVam
10-14-2008, 20:55:40
i don't see five.

someguy
10-15-2008, 15:54:37
oops, I hit save instead of publish.
I have a file backed up at home. I'll get it up when I have a chance

someguy
10-22-2008, 00:05:14
I lost the next chapter, and I don't have time to make a new one.
I have a lot of personal and other issues to sort out, so I am CANCELLING the story until further notice.
I hope you can understand.

LovelyUndeadVam
10-22-2008, 00:15:29
aw. :'(:'(:'( but if you have personal things to take care of i understand. :sad: i hope that you can write it after all this is over with. :)

someguy
10-22-2008, 00:16:56
Yeah.
Personal issues, I have to deal with, grades, friends, a relationship, legal issues, money issues. That kind of stuff.

LovelyUndeadVam
10-22-2008, 00:20:51
well, i hope you get it all resolved.

someguy
10-22-2008, 00:27:52
I'm not looking forward to a huge legal battle either. So I'm hoping to get paid before I have to sue.

LovelyUndeadVam
10-22-2008, 00:29:05
SUE?!?!?! uhh, nevermind, i don't want to know. heh.

someguy
10-22-2008, 00:35:16
Yeha. I'm not 18 though, so I can't sue by myself.
But my parents are always willing. If you find it that important, then pm me and I might tell you more.

LovelyUndeadVam
10-22-2008, 00:37:46
uh, okay. it seems personal. so i probably won't.

someguy
10-22-2008, 00:38:41
Ok.
I don't mind if you ever feel like asking. But I gotta go for tonight. See ya

LovelyUndeadVam
10-22-2008, 00:39:08
good bye. :yaya:

someguy
10-22-2008, 00:56:13
Jk i'm here for a while.

Mistery
10-22-2008, 00:59:46
Please go to chit chat if you'd like to continue your discussions about off-topic things :)

someguy
12-15-2008, 02:06:56
For anyone still interested, or whoever cares, the new chapter is up.

LovelyUndeadVam
12-19-2008, 21:45:35
WOOT! i loved it! :D:D:D more more more!

someguy
12-19-2008, 21:53:40
I'm working on the next chapter.

LovelyUndeadVam
12-20-2008, 05:47:35
good. hurry. cause i can't wait. :D

humphryboop
12-20-2008, 18:38:53
...YES.
NEW CHAPTERS! :D
Someguy, this is one of my favorite things to read :P

Justeazy
12-22-2008, 00:07:43
AWESOME!!!

Cliffhangers, anyone???
:haha:

someguy
12-22-2008, 01:06:28
Chapter 6 is up.

Justeazy
12-22-2008, 01:44:40
Ouch, my FACE!!!
:P

LovelyUndeadVam
12-22-2008, 05:21:14
oh, wow, that makes mah face HURT. that was good though, and i'm also CITED for the next chapter!!! :D:D:D


:happydancing: X a bunch

someguy
12-22-2008, 16:40:54
Chapter 7 is in the works

someguy
01-06-2009, 04:36:25
While I'm working on 7, why don't you guys discuss what you think will happen in the next chapter. I'm eager to see what fans can think about in the story. Remember, the next chapter focuses on Dave(I think, I'm a bit out of it right now).

someguy
01-09-2009, 23:40:58
Well, someone can take the story over, I'm leaving for good now.

humphryboop
01-20-2009, 02:41:23
ummm,what's going to happen to the story? well this sucks :/

EscapeGirl
01-20-2009, 02:55:52
This story thread is open to whomever would like to continue it. :) (Just no chit chat here. Only post if you are writing more to the original story. ;))

Justeazy
01-27-2009, 03:52:46
Okay someguy, I know there are reasons behind why you are leaving, but you don't have to stop your story!
Everyone loves it, and it isn't connected with this site, so you can still do that without much problems here, right???
(Even though he is gone, he still might come back to read this)

someguy
01-29-2009, 01:33:54
Hello everyone. I am one of Kendalls (someguys) friends. I signed in using his computer last night, and am here to clear a few things up.
Kendall has gotten a lot of emails asking why he had left. Other than the reasons stated in his goodbye post, there are a few people here that p'd him off. He was also tired of some noobs spamming forums (that's what he said). But the big one is...he truly stopped caring a few months ago.
As to his story...he doesn't want to continue it because he wants to sever all ties to Gamershood. He doesn't want anything to do with this place anymore, so he decided to stop the story.
He hopes you don't hate him to much for this, but this is where he stands.

This is what he told me to type, and is what I am typing now.

humphryboop
01-31-2009, 02:00:55
Mmkay, This is what I think Dave would look like as a zombie.
Not too good, but still :P I made it on TekTek.

EDIT: Anddd Tina :P

humphryboop
02-11-2009, 23:24:31
Ok, sorry for doubleposting, but Mr.Someguy said he might start his story again. yayyyyyy :D

humphryboop
02-18-2009, 03:42:57
Next chapter is getting made 8D