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Emo234
09-28-2008, 05:09:48
Ok this is where u can post poems,rate them,nd give advice for them.anyone can post,but please keep them rule safe ;) If u feel offended by a comment about ur poem,plz report it or otherwise just ignore the comment ;) Have fun.I'll start :D

As I sit here wondering,this pain peirces my heart.As this pain grows my heart weakens.It's like I can't win for loseing.All these things swarm in my head and I can't seem to distract myself.All I think is when will this pain stop,when will this suffering end.Why do I fught when I don't want to.Why do I shut them out?Why do I hate them?Why do they treat me like this,just as I trust them they give me another reason to hate them.Why do I get shoved aside and beaten down,like an animal in captivity.My heart aches every day,longing for forgiving love,and acceptance.Can I please stand up without being kicked down over and over?Forced off the edge.But no one cares.Trying to hold on,but now one see's how broken we are inside.No-one trys.As I see my life crumble before my eyes.I cry in pain and dispare.I just don't get heard.I lye here in scilence,as I slowly fade away.


plz note:"I was going through a ruff time,so plz don't be too hard on me :D"

LovelyUndeadVam
09-28-2008, 05:12:24
wow. that was REALLY good, emo. reminds me of what i like to write about in my poems. ;)

Emo234
09-28-2008, 05:15:18
Thnx alot,I was wondering what kind of feedback I would get,lol. Thnx again

Well if u want post them here:D I would love to read them!!!!!!!!

LovelyUndeadVam
09-28-2008, 05:19:45
ohh, i have one. :)

The tears of blood flow heavily,
and I can't breathe.
Get off my chest,
I'm not going to be who you want.
I'll wear my dark clothes,
just to get at you.
I'll put on black make-up,
just to see your sneer.
Do you think you own me?
FYI, I own my soul,
not you.
Get off my chest.
Breathe.
Breathe.
My life is my own,
I make it what I want,
and you can't be there to run it,
because I am my own person.
A rebel.
Don't like it?
Get a life.

Emo234
09-28-2008, 05:21:29
wow that is really good too.I like how u stick it to whoever that was written about :appl:

LovelyUndeadVam
09-28-2008, 05:22:21
it was written to all the preppy people at my school that give me dirty looks. it's all because they think that i "cut myself".

Clank
09-28-2008, 08:17:35
WOW you guys those were really good

@emo- I love how you sort of sum up life
@luv- I love how dark and slick it is
@both- Really, really gud

Here is mine

In fear i tremble, i shake and shake. In fear i feast on everything that i shake about. It beats like a siren in the devils fear. The fears are coming. The fears are roaming all around the streets. Coming to get me, upon blissed fears. The fears i shake about are all coming, they're coming, and i am running away.

LovelyUndeadVam
09-28-2008, 17:37:01
:o! that's amazing geordie!

Clank
09-28-2008, 17:38:50
IS IT!? I have wrote loads better

Emo234
09-28-2008, 17:46:01
yes it is really good.U explain actions nd feelings very well ;) I like it

Clank
09-28-2008, 17:47:21
I dont know guys, i think it isnt very good *false hope*

Emo234
09-28-2008, 17:48:37
That's what I thought about mine so don't worry bout it ;)

Clank
09-28-2008, 17:49:21
OK thanks but i will post a better one

Emo234
09-28-2008, 17:51:52
yup me too,but l8er.I need to write some new ones too,cuz I only writ 2 :(

LovelyUndeadVam
09-28-2008, 17:55:47
if i could access all mine i would have about...twenty to thirty. :S yeah i had a really rough time in life and i wrote to make it better. not saying that everything is okay now, but it's getting better. ;) i could probably write another one.

Emo234
09-28-2008, 18:07:04
ok here's number two.I don't like this one as much as I like the first.


As I sit here trapped in my head.
My thoughts race in my head.
I scream,but no-one hears.
I try,but no-one understands.
The pressure,the deppression.
The confusion overwelms my brain.
The anger.
The resistance.
The love.
The hate.
The sweet.
The sorry.
Life,life can come,and life can go.
The days,hours,minutes slowly dissolving my exstance.
Like clay shattered on the pavement.
The tourture of the thought.
Do I like it or do I hate it?
The tears that I hide behind my eyes.
The pain in my thought won't go away.
The pain won't lessen.
The pain just won't fade away.

Isaiah
09-28-2008, 18:09:57
why are they all so sad :(
but still they are really good

Clank
09-28-2008, 18:10:31
Its good but it lacks continuous rythym (PLEASE TAKE NO OFFENCE IN THAT)

Emo234
09-28-2008, 18:11:21
Cuz I was going throught a ruff time so I wrote about it nd this is the result :D


@geordieboy-That is exactly what I thought,I just posted cuz I wanted to see what ppl would think. :D Thnx

Isaiah
09-28-2008, 18:14:25
well its happy now!

Emo234
09-28-2008, 18:15:25
good :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D

LovelyUndeadVam
09-28-2008, 19:35:30
i can't write happy poems. :( sorry. sad or depressing poems have more meaning.


Smile.
Laugh.
Keep the lie from being exposed.
Wake up.
Put on make-up.
Try not to cry.
Compose that careful mask.
Don't let the true identity show.
No one cares.
Keep that lie from being exposed.
Look into their eyes.
They can't see.
Blind.
Severed from life.
Personal hell overtakes.
Friends?
Lies.
The lie is being exposed.
No light.
No sound.
No love.
Nothing.
Black.
Get ready.
You're entering my world now.

Clank
09-28-2008, 20:14:18
Cool poem

LovelyUndeadVam
09-28-2008, 20:17:57
thank you.

Emo234
09-29-2008, 01:12:55
wow that's my life right there lol,really good luv

LovelyUndeadVam
09-29-2008, 01:13:58
thanks. :D

Clank
09-30-2008, 12:02:43
Ok so here is my next one, i think it is loads better than my first

I lie awake.
I tremble.
I shudder.
I make my point.
But it gets lost in the fray.
I tighten my threads and fasten my lace
I pace the walk of fame,
up the street and out into the open
The welcoming doors pull you in
the echoes of pain drag you in
a day of suffering, a day of pain
Thats what it is.
Thats what it is.
The walk of fame lights up my path.
Enter the door i do and pace up the steps.
I fall, i never stop, i keep falling, i drop.
The fall was long.
Thats what it is.
Its me, my life, day after day

LovelyUndeadVam
09-30-2008, 14:47:14
:o! wow that was really good too Geordie!

Clank
09-30-2008, 14:49:22
Not to be big headed but i thought that was good :P but my first one was rubbish :D:S

LovelyUndeadVam
09-30-2008, 14:52:10
naw it's not big headed. :P i know my poems are good because i've been writing the same stuff for years, but i'm just to modest to say that kind of stuff. even now i want to deny what i just said. and your first one WAS good! no worries. :D

Clank
09-30-2008, 14:54:35
Ok then what about this very short poem

I lie my head upon the pillow
I sink into the clouds
they laugh at me
they bully me
i am helpless
in the shrouds
i gaze at them
and they gaze back,
they hurt me so bad
they tear at me like im an animal
i feel helpless
i feel alone
but then i wake up
my morale is back
now i can go to sleep

LovelyUndeadVam
09-30-2008, 14:55:42
see, your poems are really freakin(excuse my language ;)) good!

Clank
09-30-2008, 14:57:58
You see i dont think that even though i am in the top 0.0004% cleverest teens in the country

LovelyUndeadVam
09-30-2008, 15:01:18
.0004%??

Clank
09-30-2008, 15:04:20
Yeah, not joking either, There are about 5 million in the country and i am in the top 0.0004%, well i used to be but i may have slipped down to 0.5% but it is close enough for me, on my exams i got the highest levels in the year!!!

LovelyUndeadVam
09-30-2008, 15:08:06
:o woooow. i wish i could be that smart, but people in my country are like...SUPER CHILDREN. i'm always like MY GOSH how are they so effin smart?! but oh well. i'm probably like...60% or something. i'm not TOO stupid (though i have my blonde moments)

this ones not too good...it's about my best friend, and i can never seem to write about her:

Silence.
I am broken.
Depressed.
How is it any wonder?
Things could have been better.
Much better.
If only you'd been there.
I could not see without your light,
so I was left to wander the dark.
Adapt.
Survive.
My eyes are used to this darkness,
but you choose now to be there.
Now you're just blinding.
Go away.
I don't need you anymore.
Best friends were supposed
to be there in the time of need.
That is past.
My best friend...
doesn't exist.

Clank
09-30-2008, 15:10:29
OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOMMMMMMM MMMMMMMMMGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG GG



That was so good :D:P:) really great....


also 60% isnt that bad LOL

LovelyUndeadVam
09-30-2008, 15:11:29
wow was it really good enough to get that reaction?

hahaha. yes i know. :) i'm smart enough. just not TOO smart, you know?

Clank
09-30-2008, 15:32:47
Yeah i know !!!

LovelyUndeadVam
09-30-2008, 15:38:45
here's a happy one!

BANG!
Man I love that sound.
Get ready, here it comes again!
BANG!
It's just too fun!
I cannot even fathom why!
BANG!
Oh, wait, looks like it's wrapping up.
It getting to the end but—
BANG!
OH!
I just won.
Because my opponent...
scratched on the eight ball!

Clank
09-30-2008, 15:42:25
FAB LUV i love happy poems here is my happy poem


A smile is infectious
contageous
Outrageous
A smile is so happy
and merry
and cheery
A smile is so funny
and lovely
and cuddly
A smile is great
so smiley
oh so so smiley :)

LovelyUndeadVam
09-30-2008, 15:43:23
hahaha! that one made me smile!! :P it IS infectious!

Clank
09-30-2008, 15:45:12
That is my favourite poem, and i am glad it made you smile :)

LovelyUndeadVam
09-30-2008, 15:46:40
:D it made me smile like that.

Clank
09-30-2008, 15:49:51
which means what ??? :D

LovelyUndeadVam
09-30-2008, 15:51:43
it means that i smiled a BIG smile like this >>> :D:D:D:D:D:D:D

Clank
09-30-2008, 15:52:56
Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh OH kk!! have you any more

LovelyUndeadVam
09-30-2008, 15:54:12
ah, no. but i need to go. my cough is getting worse and i can't even type well. bye!

Clank
09-30-2008, 16:00:09
OK bye LOVELY hope you feel a lot better

Emo234
09-30-2008, 16:56:53
wow this is the one thread I started that ppl actually took on to :D

Clank
09-30-2008, 17:14:25
hi agen so did you like my smile poem, if i keep going off its because my connection is not very good

Emo234
09-30-2008, 17:24:06
Ummmm.....Idk i'm talking to sooooo many ppl I didn't have time to search through to read the new ones,but I'm sure it's great,lol.Awwww that's ok,man I need to start writing again,lol.Idk what to write about tho

Clank
09-30-2008, 17:27:24
I know same here, you, lilliput, pratik, animal ....

Emo234
09-30-2008, 17:29:06
Wait what???? They write too

Clank
09-30-2008, 17:30:25
no, im just talking in general

Emo234
09-30-2008, 17:33:02
Well I'm still confused,srry i woke up 30 minutes ago lol

Clank
09-30-2008, 17:39:20
Haha lol

Emo234
09-30-2008, 17:40:31
We should write a poem tegother :D

Clank
09-30-2008, 17:43:31
Yeah!!!!!!!!! OK so you write the first line and i write the second

Emo234
09-30-2008, 17:45:45
This will be about us as friends ;)

I laugh,u smile

Clank
09-30-2008, 17:48:57
I blink, you blink

Emo234
09-30-2008, 17:54:56
We sit,we think (Hope that goes)

Clank
09-30-2008, 18:00:26
I laugh, you smile
I blink, you blink
we sit, we think
we stare, we gaze (hope that goes)

Emo234
09-30-2008, 18:03:47
I laugh,you smile
I blink,you blink
we sit,we think
we stare,we gaze
we play all these days (hope that goes lol)

Clank
09-30-2008, 18:08:29
I laugh,you smile
I blink,you blink
we sit,we think
we stare,we gaze
we play all these days
Your sweet, caring smile (:S)

Emo234
09-30-2008, 18:10:39
I laugh,you smile
I blink,you blink
we sit,we think
we stare,we gaze
we play all these days
Your sweet, caring smile
That can brighten a mile (tell me if that's too cheesy)

Clank
09-30-2008, 18:13:39
NO it is fine ;)



I laugh,you smile
I blink,you blink
we sit,we think
we stare,we gaze
we play all these days
Your sweet, caring smile
That can brighten a mile
My eyes touch yours

Emo234
09-30-2008, 18:23:18
I laugh,you smile
I blink,you blink
we sit,we think
we stare,we gaze
we play all these days
Your sweet, caring smile
That can brighten a mile
My eyes touch yours
Which my heart adores (ummm....I think that fits)

Clank
09-30-2008, 18:27:20
I laugh,you smile
I blink,you blink
we sit,we think
we stare,we gaze
we play all these days
Your sweet, caring smile
That can brighten a mile
My eyes touch yours
Which my heart adores (yeah it does)
My heart it pounds

Emo234
09-30-2008, 18:30:33
I laugh,you smile
I blink,you blink
we sit,we think
we stare,we gaze
we play all these days
Your sweet, caring smile
That can brighten a mile
My eyes touch yours
Which my heart adores
My heart it pounds
As our friendship bounds (does that make sense)

Clank
09-30-2008, 18:34:02
Sortta but thats what i like about poems, it doesnt have to make sense> :)

I laugh,you smile
I blink,you blink
we sit,we think
we stare,we gaze
we play all these days
Your sweet, caring smile
That can brighten a mile
My eyes touch yours
Which my heart adores
My heart it pounds
As our friendship bounds
Our souls in bonds

Emo234
09-30-2008, 18:43:45
oh I'm stuck lol

Clank
09-30-2008, 18:46:06
I laugh,you smile
I blink,you blink
we sit,we think
we stare,we gaze
we play all these days
Your sweet, caring smile
That can brighten a mile
My eyes touch yours
Which my heart adores
My heart it pounds
As our friendship bounds
Our souls in bonds


mmm what rhymes with bonds:

blondes
fonds
i will change it

I laugh,you smile
I blink,you blink
we sit,we think
we stare,we gaze
we play all these days
Your sweet, caring smile
That can brighten a mile
My eyes touch yours
Which my heart adores
My heart it pounds
As our friendship bounds
Bound together in bonds so strong

Emo234
09-30-2008, 18:50:47
I laugh,you smile
I blink,you blink
we sit,we think
we stare,we gaze
we play all these days
Your sweet, caring smile
That can brighten a mile
My eyes touch yours
Which my heart adores
My heart it pounds
As our friendship bounds
Bound together in bonds so strong
As we talk so long (better :))

Clank
09-30-2008, 18:53:11
I laugh,you smile
I blink,you blink
we sit,we think
we stare,we gaze
we play all these days
Your sweet, caring smile
That can brighten a mile
My eyes touch yours
Which my heart adores
My heart it pounds
As our friendship bounds
Bound together in bonds so strong
As we talk so long
We chat and we talk and giggle and sing

Emo234
09-30-2008, 18:58:36
I laugh,you smile
I blink,you blink
we sit,we think
we stare,we gaze
we play all these days
Your sweet, caring smile
That can brighten a mile
My eyes touch yours
Which my heart adores
My heart it pounds
As our friendship bounds
Bound together in bonds so strong
As we talk so long
We chat and we talk and giggle and sing
As we send our diigital bling (:haha: that's all I could think of)

Clank
09-30-2008, 19:01:06
I laugh,you smile
I blink,you blink
we sit,we think
we stare,we gaze
we play all these days
Your sweet, caring smile
That can brighten a mile
My eyes touch yours
Which my heart adores
My heart it pounds
As our friendship bounds
Bound together in bonds so strong
As we talk so long
We chat and we talk and giggle and sing
As we send our diigital bling
We dance and laugh and smirk and look

Emo234
09-30-2008, 19:04:18
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I laugh,you smile
I blink,you blink
we sit,we think
we stare,we gaze
we play all these days
Your sweet, caring smile
That can brighten a mile
My eyes touch yours
Which my heart adores
My heart it pounds
As our friendship bounds
Bound together in bonds so strong
As we talk so long
We chat and we talk and giggle and sing
As we send our diigital bling
We dance and laugh and smirk and look
As you write,and I read your book

Clank
09-30-2008, 19:10:43
HAHAHAH love that line

I laugh,you smile
I blink,you blink
we sit,we think
we stare,we gaze
we play all these days
Your sweet, caring smile
That can brighten a mile
My eyes touch yours
Which my heart adores
My heart it pounds
As our friendship bounds
Bound together in bonds so strong
As we talk so long
We chat and we talk and giggle and sing
As we send our diigital bling
We dance and laugh and smirk and look
As you write,and I read your book
We watch and play all every forum game

Emo234
09-30-2008, 19:13:57
I knew u would,lol

I laugh,you smile
I blink,you blink
we sit,we think
we stare,we gaze
we play all these days
Your sweet, caring smile
That can brighten a mile
My eyes touch yours
Which my heart adores
My heart it pounds
As our friendship bounds
Bound together in bonds so strong
As we talk so long
We chat and we talk and giggle and sing
As we send our diigital bling
We dance and laugh and smirk and look
As you write,and I read your book
We watch and play all every forum game
As every where we go,we see each other's name

Clank
09-30-2008, 19:21:46
I laugh,you smile
I blink,you blink
we sit,we think
we stare,we gaze
we play all these days
Your sweet, caring smile
That can brighten a mile
My eyes touch yours
Which my heart adores
My heart it pounds
As our friendship bounds
Bound together in bonds so strong
As we talk so long
We chat and we talk and giggle and sing
As we send our diigital bling
We dance and laugh and smirk and look
As you write,and I read your book
We watch and play all every forum game
As every where we go,we see each other's name
All our friends are cool and fun

Emo234
09-30-2008, 19:23:57
I laugh,you smile
I blink,you blink
we sit,we think
we stare,we gaze
we play all these days
Your sweet, caring smile
That can brighten a mile
My eyes touch yours
Which my heart adores
My heart it pounds
As our friendship bounds
Bound together in bonds so strong
As we talk so long
We chat and we talk and giggle and sing
As we send our diigital bling
We dance and laugh and smirk and look
As you write,and I read your book
We watch and play all every forum game
As every where we go,we see each other's name
All our friends are cool and fun
As we get to know each one

Clank
09-30-2008, 19:26:01
sorry for the delay before, i have to go in about 10 minutes so if we wrap it up soon we can always write another one kk

I laugh,you smile
I blink,you blink
we sit,we think
we stare,we gaze
we play all these days
Your sweet, caring smile
That can brighten a mile
My eyes touch yours
Which my heart adores
My heart it pounds
As our friendship bounds
Bound together in bonds so strong
As we talk so long
We chat and we talk and giggle and sing
As we send our diigital bling
We dance and laugh and smirk and look
As you write,and I read your book
We watch and play all every forum game
As every where we go,we see each other's name
All our friends are cool and fun
As we get to know each one
We are united together at gamershood

Emo234
09-30-2008, 19:28:42
I laugh,you smile
I blink,you blink
we sit,we think
we stare,we gaze
we play all these days
Your sweet, caring smile
That can brighten a mile
My eyes touch yours
Which my heart adores
My heart it pounds
As our friendship bounds
Bound together in bonds so strong
As we talk so long
We chat and we talk and giggle and sing
As we send our diigital bling
We dance and laugh and smirk and look
As you write,and I read your book
We watch and play all every forum game
As every where we go,we see each other's name
All our friends are cool and fun
As we get to know each one
We are united together at gamershood
All but to change our mood

Clank
09-30-2008, 19:30:18
OK should this be the final one??? :)


I laugh,you smile
I blink,you blink
we sit,we think
we stare,we gaze
we play all these days
Your sweet, caring smile
That can brighten a mile
My eyes touch yours
Which my heart adores
My heart it pounds
As our friendship bounds
Bound together in bonds so strong
As we talk so long
We chat and we talk and giggle and sing
As we send our diigital bling
We dance and laugh and smirk and look
As you write,and I read your book
We watch and play all every forum game
As every where we go,we see each other's name
All our friends are cool and fun
As we get to know each one
We are united together at gamershood
All but to change our mood
We are friends, forever and ever

Emo234
09-30-2008, 19:33:35
yup I think it should,hahahaha :haha: that was fun,nd with a good turn out too,lol

Clank
09-30-2008, 19:35:50
OK bye, this should be the official GH poem

Emo234
09-30-2008, 19:43:45
I agree,hahaha that would be cool

Mistery
09-30-2008, 20:02:44
Very nice poem Emo & Geordieboy!!! :D :appl:

Adventure
09-30-2008, 20:31:35
Very nice poem indeed. Great job, Geordieboy & Emo! :appl:

LovelyUndeadVam
09-30-2008, 20:34:26
i liked it. :appl: it was very nicely written!

Emo234
09-30-2008, 23:05:16
Thnx to all :D

Clank
10-01-2008, 07:33:36
YEAH THANKS to everyone for comments :D

Rima
10-01-2008, 10:35:06
Great work geordie nd Emo..:applause: :)I liked it too its a very nice poem.....:yeahcool:

Clank
10-01-2008, 16:00:07
Thanks RIMA

Emo234
10-01-2008, 16:55:33
Awwwww.......thank u rima :hug2:

super_T
10-01-2008, 22:47:52
Here's a haiku I made:

Old dewy meadow
Flowers sway in the sweet breeze
A breathtaking sight

LovelyUndeadVam
10-01-2008, 23:13:04
:appl: that's very nice super_T :)

super_T
10-02-2008, 00:28:27
thanks

LovelyUndeadVam
10-02-2008, 00:43:57
welcome. :)

Emo234
10-02-2008, 01:58:22
Very good super_t :D nd welcome to the poems thread :D glad to have a new member here ;)

Clank
10-02-2008, 21:08:23
OK ok here is a sad poem i wrote myself, it is sad i think... so i'll let you read it

I come home, i shiver
I sit on the stairs and hear them argue, hear them scream
I sit down, i tremble, i cover my ears, its hard, it may seem
I lie down and cry
I lie on the couch and hear the glasses smash
Hear the vases against the wall crash
I fall down and shake
I cant take it, i just cant, then i hear the footsteps
i hear the noises
the door sways it opens, i lie on the floor
the tears drop hard, so hard, so so hard.
I hear it, i can feel it, i cant see it, i know its there.
I go to bed and hear the creaks,
its happening again, all over again, it doesnt stop
i get up and i go to school, does it end
no it doesnt. it carries on. i feel alone, no one to talk to
i remain silent, i dont speak, i shake and i tremble.
I walk through the door and it continues. Its hard, so fierce
I pick up the phone, i put it down again.
I pick up the rope and i put it down.
I pick up the knife, i put it down.
It starts again, over and over.
I fall and continue to fall. Its hard, so so hard.
When i hit the ground, i feel like dirt, like muck
When i hear the shouting, its like im a dog.
Trapped in a cage, like im alone, trapped in bars.
When will it stop? It needs to end
It doesnt and it never will.
Help. Please help. i tremble and shake.
All i need is hope, someone give me hope.
I see a climbing frame, it looks big. I have rope in my hand.
I pace up and down, i make my choice.
What will it be. What could it be.
Its would be over, i think.
The suffering, the pain gone. The end.
No one would care. no one would remember.

LovelyUndeadVam
10-02-2008, 23:20:41
:o! are these written about your home life? because most of mine are about how I feel and how I react to things, but i don't know about you.

:appl: very well done.

Clank
10-03-2008, 07:23:18
Nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!!! i
just wanteed to write a very sad poem so i wrote it about that d you think i would have time to go on the computer if my life were like that

Chocbubbles
10-03-2008, 07:38:30
wow that's a really good poem Geordieboy :appl:

pratik732006
10-03-2008, 11:10:39
Wow really nice poem geordie :applause:

Clank
10-03-2008, 14:54:49
Thanks Chocbubbles, Pratik and LUV

Emo234
10-03-2008, 16:22:43
Wow :o man that was good. U have some serious talent :D.I hope that's not what u go through every day tho:S.

:appl:

Clank
10-03-2008, 16:34:46
Thanks................again, no it is not what i go through every day i just wanted to write a sad poem, so i did it on that... :( it is sad isnt it but i am happy full of happiness:):D

Emo234
10-03-2008, 16:37:13
Well that makes me feel better too.LOL I got worried u were going to commit suicide lol

Clank
10-03-2008, 16:39:58
haha LOL d you think i would have time to go on the computer if i experienced THAT???

Emo234
10-03-2008, 16:41:09
Ummm.....well I guess not lol.But I don't have that much common sense :D

Clank
10-03-2008, 16:44:26
haha LOL :D:D:D:D

Clank
10-04-2008, 10:54:46
Ok heres my next poem, it is sad as well so get those tissues out, I HAVE WORKED REALLY HARD ON IT SO PLEASE BE NICE :S

Lucy was a poor girl living in a rich world
named her baby hope when she was just 14
she was hoping for a better world for this little girl
but the apple doesnt fall too far from the tree
when she gets that call hopes too far gone,
her babys on the way, theres nothing left inside.
Im like that as i lie under my duvet, taking painkillers
to make it go away.
I cry as i lie under my diary, under the pages of sadness and hate
I hate all those moments that held me togetherbecause i hate the day
i found out i was lame
i took all my money, all my cash and credit cards and held it
so tight in my hand
I ran for the station where i sat on the seats in the bay
Lucys ambitious she wants to be a politician shes
been dreaming about it since she was a girl
she thought that shed be the one to change the world
she got it wrong when she paved the way for women in a mans world
Life happened,
house
kids
two cars
money hit the jar
cheques that dont go very far
I'm like that as i lie under my duvet, thinking about all the sorry thing
Left my family some hundreds of years back
and now i never get any cards or cake for birthdays
its really hard just to be me.
Left the phone on speed dial and rang up the doc
asking for a cure
but i couldnt get a one cos he was too busy
why would he treat common scum like me
I felt really good when i passed an old lady
who asked me what the time was,
I had to tell her i didnt know cos i was too poor
to even afford a watch
but when i crept under the table
i felt some sadness and tears
I didnt realise that the table was holding back my fears
I wasnt any different from cindy and lucy who
tried to make a difference to thee world
Now i lie back on my sofa looking at pictures of me
realising what id become was not to be believed...
It wasnt me.

Edawg
10-04-2008, 11:53:43
An exceedingly fat friend of mine,
when asked at what hour he'd dine,
replied "at eleven,
at five three and seven
and again at a quarter to nine"

Clank
10-04-2008, 11:58:27
Ha ha funny little limeric edawg

Edawg
10-04-2008, 12:01:28
;)

There was a young man from Timbuktoo,
whose limericks would end at line twoooo.

Clank
10-04-2008, 12:06:18
There was a young woman from eeling
she had a peculiar feeling
she lay on her back
and had a wee all over the ceiling

(sorry if i caused offence to anyone)

Edawg
10-04-2008, 12:07:56
Gahaha. ;)

The limerick is furtive and mean

You must keep her in close quarantine

Or she sneaks to the slums

And promptly becomes

Disorderly, drunk and obscene.

Tis a favourite project of mine,

A new value of pi to assign.

I would fix it at 3,

For it's simpler, you see,

Than 3 point 1 4 1 5 9

Clank
10-04-2008, 12:15:00
I have fount the site you are getting these from

http://www.freewebs.com/limericks/

Rima
10-04-2008, 12:19:54
Wow....geordie ...did u wrote tht huge nice poem by urself....?? if yes thn :hmm:....hmmm....i must say u are really good in this :applause: :)

Clank
10-04-2008, 12:21:41
well to tell you the truth the first two lines are from a song but after that i wrote it all by myself, i needed ideas to get me going and i had that song in my head.. so but the rest of it i wrote all by myself and THANKYOU :)

Edawg
10-04-2008, 12:24:40
I have fount the site you are getting these from

http://www.freewebs.com/limericks/
Yah, they've got tonnes

Rima
10-04-2008, 12:29:51
@geordie....

hmmm...seems like you are a poet my frnd...:) :D..keep thm coming fmr ur mind...;)

Clank
10-04-2008, 12:34:51
This is a poem i wrote in previous pages I LOVE IT and it is all from me

A smile is infectious
contageous
Outrageous
A smile is so happy
and merry
and cheery
A smile is so funny
and lovely
and cuddly
A smile is great
so smiley
oh so so smiley :)

Rima
10-04-2008, 12:39:15
nice poem geo....:hug3: u rhyme thm really very well :appl: :)

Clank
10-04-2008, 12:45:08
Thanks here is a very short happy poem

Your laugh it tickles
you give me the giggles
I chuckle and you tickle
My laugh makes you chuckle
our giggles and laughs and chuckles
are full of chuckly giggles

:D

pratik732006
10-04-2008, 16:54:01
Nice poems again geordie you really are an good writer

Emo234
10-04-2008, 17:58:26
Hahahahaha that made me chuckle :D.:appl: good again geordieboy!!!!!!!!!!!!

Clank
10-04-2008, 18:00:53
Have you read my really long one on the previous pages and thankyou

Emo234
10-04-2008, 18:07:19
Ummmm.......no :$ should I?

Clank
10-04-2008, 18:09:05
heres the poem that took me ages the first three lines are from a song but after that it is all down to me

Lucy was a poor girl living in a rich world
named her baby hope when she was just 14
she was hoping for a better world for this little girl
but the apple doesnt fall too far from the tree
when she gets that call hopes too far gone,
her babys on the way, theres nothing left inside.
Im like that as i lie under my duvet, taking painkillers
to make it go away.
I cry as i lie under my diary, under the pages of sadness and hate
I hate all those moments that held me togetherbecause i hate the day
i found out i was lame
i took all my money, all my cash and credit cards and held it
so tight in my hand
I ran for the station where i sat on the seats in the bay
Lucys ambitious she wants to be a politician shes
been dreaming about it since she was a girl
she thought that shed be the one to change the world
she got it wrong when she paved the way for women in a mans world
Life happened,
house
kids
two cars
money hit the jar
cheques that dont go very far
I'm like that as i lie under my duvet, thinking about all the sorry thing
Left my family some hundreds of years back
and now i never get any cards or cake for birthdays
its really hard just to be me.
Left the phone on speed dial and rang up the doc
asking for a cure
but i couldnt get a one cos he was too busy
why would he treat common scum like me
I felt really good when i passed an old lady
who asked me what the time was,
I had to tell her i didnt know cos i was too poor
to even afford a watch
but when i crept under the table
i felt some sadness and tears
I didnt realise that the table was holding back my fears
I wasnt any different from cindy and lucy who
tried to make a difference to thee world
Now i lie back on my sofa looking at pictures of me
realising what id become was not to be believed...
It wasnt me.

LovelyUndeadVam
10-04-2008, 18:26:25
sad poem alert.

There's nothing wrong with you.
Nothing.
Don't you believe me?
I can't do this on my own!
My light is gone,
and it's just too dark.
I'm weak.
I cry every night,
but no one hears.
I'm very, very quiet.
I ask only that I have some daylight,
for this eternal night has finally gotten to me.
I cannot take it anymore!
Please,
just please,
look me in eye,
and tell me I'm okay.

Isaiah
10-04-2008, 18:28:37
wowowowowowoowwowoowowwoowowowowowowowowowwo!
you guess are good

LovelyUndeadVam
10-04-2008, 18:29:27
i've been writing for about two years now. they all sound the same to me.

Isaiah
10-04-2008, 18:32:10
I wtite about nature sometimes

LovelyUndeadVam
10-04-2008, 18:33:07
:) you should post a poem.

Clank
10-04-2008, 18:37:42
Yeah you should post a poem, because the only poems in this thread areby me, LUV and emo

Isaiah
10-04-2008, 18:40:39
ummm but i am not that good
dont you see that i always say ummmm
Actually i dont but still i am not good

LovelyUndeadVam
10-04-2008, 18:41:39
so? not like we are going to throw an insult in your face! :) we are just too nice to do that kind of thing! (especially me, cause i have a heart of gold, believe it or not)

Edawg
10-04-2008, 18:42:03
Moahr Limahrihkes.

There once was a fisher named Fischer,
Who fished for a fish in a fissure.
The fish with a grin,
pulled the fisherman in,
Now they're searching the fissure for Fischer.

LovelyUndeadVam
10-04-2008, 18:43:09
wow. :) it rhymes so well. sounds like a nursery rhyme too. :P

Isaiah
10-04-2008, 18:43:54
no *says no very quickly, stermly, and smart but nonemotional personality*

LovelyUndeadVam
10-04-2008, 18:46:41
okay then. don't. i'll post another one.

i see the moon (nursery rhyme that actually exists)

i see the moon
and the moon sees me.
the moon see the somebody i'd like to see.
god bless the moon
and god bless me.
god bless the the somebody i'd like to see!

Isaiah
10-04-2008, 18:47:37
nice

LovelyUndeadVam
10-04-2008, 18:50:04
its a song. my mom used to sing it to my sister when she was little. this is the one she sang to me.

you are my sunshine

you are my sunshine,
my only sunshine,
you make me happy,
when skies are grey,
you'll never know dear,
how much i love you,
please don't take my sunshine away.

~GH Dog~
10-04-2008, 18:51:25
my mom sang that to me along time ago too

LovelyUndeadVam
10-04-2008, 18:56:28
:) i always remember my mom singing it to me. i would sing along and we would have so much fun. ah to go back in time and do it all again. i would pay to do it.

Clank
10-04-2008, 18:57:50
Ha ha i have heard that song on a film i recently saw,,,, mmm i cant think which one though

Isaiah
10-04-2008, 18:58:14
when my mom sang it to me i would ly on the floor
I thout it was comfertable

LovelyUndeadVam
10-04-2008, 19:00:44
yeah...hmm whats another little rhyme i absolutely love...:hmm:

good night,
sleep tight,
don't let the bedbugs bite,
and if they do,
take your shoe,
and knock em till they're black and blue.

:D i love that one. :haha:

Isaiah
10-04-2008, 19:03:18
I remember that one too
but we would squish them

LovelyUndeadVam
10-04-2008, 19:05:31
:P hahaha. i know a lot of nursery rhymes. :) like this one that not many know:

hickory, dickory, dock,
the mouse ran up the clock.
the clock struck one,
and down he run!
hickory, dickory, dock.

dickery, dickery, dare,
the pig flew up in the air.
the man in brown
soon brought him down!
dickery, dickery, dare.

they are all poetic too. :P

Clank
10-04-2008, 19:08:31
Little miss muffet sat on her tuffet
eating her curd and whey
along came a spider and sat down beside her
and little miss muffet ran away

:P

LovelyUndeadVam
10-04-2008, 19:09:16
:haha: i remember that one!! hahaha!

Hey diddle diddle, the cat and the fiddle,
The cow jumped over the moon.
The little dog laughed to see such fun
And the dish ran away with the spoon!

Clank
10-04-2008, 19:13:53
Humpty dumpty sat on a wall
Humpty dumpty had a great fall
all the kings horses and all the kings men
couldnt put humpty together again

The grand old duke of your
he had ten thousand men
he marched them up to the top of the hill
and he marched them down again
and when they were up they were up
and when they were down they were down
and when they were only halfway up
they were neither up nor down

LovelyUndeadVam
10-04-2008, 19:19:36
Ladybird ladybird fly away home,
Your house in on fire and your children are gone,
All except one and that's little Ann,
For she crept under the frying pan.

:P

~GH Dog~
10-04-2008, 19:20:31
I like that one

LovelyUndeadVam
10-04-2008, 19:22:10
i do too. :) i used to sing it to ladybugs all the time (though i said "ladybug ladybug fly away home" but the real rhyme goes "ladybird")

Isaiah
10-04-2008, 19:29:20
:P hahaha. i know a lot of nursery rhymes. :) like this one that not many know:

hickory, dickory, dock,
the mouse ran up the clock.
the clock struck one,
and down he run!
hickory, dickory, dock.

dickery, dickery, dare,
the pig flew up in the air.
the man in brown
soon brought him down!
dickery, dickery, dare.

they are all poetic too. :P

i never heard the pig one but i heard the mouse/clock one

~GH Dog~
10-04-2008, 19:29:52
hehehehe

Emo234
10-05-2008, 02:32:41
Wow great poems guys oh nd rymes lol

funja
10-05-2008, 02:37:43
Lost in thought
i never know what to do
always stuck looking to
i never found what i sought
no matter how much i fought and fought
i am always stuck right here lost in thought

Written by Funja
2006

Emo234
10-05-2008, 02:39:07
Wow :appl: really good lil bro ;) :appl:

Chocbubbles
10-05-2008, 02:51:42
uh ok i found this poem

If all the world
Was apple pie,
And all the sea
Was ink,
And all the trees
Were bread and cheese,
What should we have
to drink?

Emo234
10-05-2008, 02:52:30
hahahahahahahahah that is so funny lol.Did u write it?

Chocbubbles
10-05-2008, 02:54:34
nope :D
i hve a big book of poems and that was the only good one :P

gamergeekgirl
10-05-2008, 14:55:42
This is my poem on deviantart. please comment and rate.
http://xxsarzxx.deviantart.com/art/My-poem-the-girl-99865710

This one is my song lyric. also comment and rate. Thank you.
http://xxsarzxx.deviantart.com/art/Random-Lyrics-99867731

someguy
10-08-2008, 15:58:55
I decided to dedicate a poem to the mods and members here for putting up with my crap for so long. I'm not good at rhyming, but I can get a point through.

I've been rude
I've been annoying
Yet you never seem to be crude
I may get mean and flame a member
but you seem to remember
that I can be nice
and give me another chance
And though I may say things
that offend or degrade you
it never seems to get to you
and you give me another chance
And for doing this I am truly greatful
and can only say thank you
I will try not to degrade you
or be mean to you
For now I am on my last thread
and it is on the verge of snapping
but maybe if I use my head
I can be nicer to you
and maybe that last thread won't snap
and I can call out to my fellow members
to help me back up

(And now I'm going to cry. Thank you guys for accepting me here. I truly love you all)

Emo234
10-08-2008, 17:15:22
Ummmm......hahaha very cool,nd true lol :haha: :rofl-smilie: jk ;) :)

Clank
10-08-2008, 17:19:58
Ha ha great poem Someguy!!:)

someguy
10-08-2008, 21:49:26
I have been pretty mean to some members, and the mods too. It's more directed at earlier members aroun when I joined, and the mods of course. But I guess it could also be directed at anyone whos been offended by me.

Mistery
10-08-2008, 22:34:05
Thanks Someguy :)

someguy
10-08-2008, 22:38:16
Of course Mistery. It was meant mostly for mods.

EscapeGirl
10-08-2008, 23:40:21
That's very nice, someguy. Thank you. :)

someguy
10-10-2008, 00:48:35
Here's on about the forums

My day is full of stress
that never seems to end.
But I have something waiting for me
right around the bend.
Because when I get home
I can honestly say,
I anticipate going to Gamershood
every single day.
A place where we can talk
to aliens birds and cats,
do you know anywhere else
that you can to that?
A place to play some games,
online or on the forums.
And we make new friends
by playing these games.
So when I feel stressed
I can honestly say
I will go to Gamershood
every single day.

(One of my better poems :D )

Chocbubbles
10-10-2008, 05:27:05
omg that's so cool Someguy :)
that's exactly how i feel :D :appl:

here's a poem for Halloween :) it doesn't really flow in places but oh well



Halloween

Grinning pumpkins glowing brightly
Children running free and lightly
Witches screaming, wolves howling
Wands waving, throats growling

At night when all is calm and still
The creatures climb upon a hill
Yipping, scuffling, scrabbling, crawling
Ghosts moaning, banshees bawling

The creatures start to run and shout
Glad to be out and about
Cause in the morning they are all aware
They have to return to their hidden lair

As the sun climbs up the sky
The creatures heave, moan and sigh
Sunlight strikes their alien faces
Signalling their return to their rightful places

The children return to their normal selves
No longer dragons, wizards, elves
Bags stuffed with a sweet and a jelly bean
Is what they wait for every single Halloween

funja
10-13-2008, 02:34:51
Gamershood
dedicated to all on gamershood through the high timnes and the low

Trying times the world has come to
but when i logged in i knew
that i forget just for a second
what is happening outside this site
it is hard to foget even if we try with all our might

Speaking different languages all around the world
but when we log on we stay the same but our
charecters change from human to
alien,ninja,cat,or dog
but we always remember what is happening behind the fog
of this woeld today

Some are too young to understand
and some just cant comprehend
what some face each day
as we log in we are privlaged in each and every way

We all know that things are getting tight
but when we see the familiar faces on here
we all see a little light
from america to switserland to canada
all the charecters arnt forgoten
eagle butterfly panda
to name a few
just remember this everyday you walk
outside and see the early morning dew

~Funja~

its not the best but its is how i feel:)

Isaiah
10-13-2008, 02:38:07
That was great!
It should be the gamershood anthom

funja
10-13-2008, 02:40:12
i dont think i could sing it and the second paragraph doesnt flow the way i would hope but i am not changing it
i like it the way it is

Isaiah
10-13-2008, 02:41:57
I think you made it great

Mistery
10-13-2008, 02:53:07
Wow, I've missed a few poems :o

Very nice rhymes everyone: Someguy, Chocbubbles, and funja :D
Really great work :appl:

RBS
10-13-2008, 03:09:34
The children return to their normal selves
No longer dragons, wizards, elves


That is a great line.

Good poems everyone.

EscapeGirl
10-13-2008, 05:21:06
Great job, you guys/girls. :D :appl: Lovely poems!! Look forward to reading more of them should any of you feel inspired. ;)

pratik732006
10-14-2008, 09:04:57
Ok i am posting one..... :D

>>>> *^* “Lonely *^* Little *^* Christmas *^* Cat” *^* <<<<

Christmas Cat…..,
Oh Christmas Cat…..,
Lonely Little Christmas Cat….,
I always wonder…..,
We’re you’re at……,
Lonely Christmas Cat…..! ! !

She ran away one Christmas eve….,
Never to be seen again…..,
That’s why I miss my Christmas cat….,
Lonely Christmas Cat…..! ! !

I leave food out every night…..,
Hoping that she’ll come back….,
I pray and pray that she’s alright…..,
Lonely Christmas Cat…..! ! !

Another season has gone by…..,
And just when tears begin to dry…..,
My memory just won’t deny…..,
My Lonely Christmas Cat….! ! !

Christmas Cat…..,
Oh Christmas Cat…..,
Lonely Little Christmas Cat….,
I always wonder…..,
We’re you’re at……,
Lonely Little Christmas Cat…..! ! !

And since you’re gone…..,
There's a chill of emptyness.....,
In my heart......,
For without you......,
I’m so Lonely Christmas Cat…..! ! !:(

Rima
10-14-2008, 14:20:20
wow....someguy ,chocbubbles ,funja nd pratik....ur poems are awesome...:appl:
great work guys :applause: :)

Clank
10-14-2008, 15:25:58
Wowwww everybody. tis really great to see other people writing poems ;)

someguy
10-14-2008, 16:20:55
Nice job pratik

EscapeGirl
10-14-2008, 18:50:41
Awww...pratik! That's a sad poem. :( But so sweet and nice. Thanks for sharing. :)

Clank
10-18-2008, 09:59:22
Ok this is a poem i made up just about 5 minutes ago

I am torn
I am lost
In a viel,In a shroud
I am one in a crowd.
Long years have past
Long minutes have gone
I am now here
Listen
How can you live your life
When nobodys watching.
See
How can you die
when nobody knows your alive
Hear
How can you feel pain
When you are painless
Touch
How can scent the angels
when you are not in heaven
I am and always will be
I will look when i cross the road
when i turn a corner
when i sleep at night
when i sink into my bed
What can i do with hope
turn it into love
into faith
how can i live when i am not here
when i am unknown

Chocbubbles
10-18-2008, 10:20:15
wow great poem Geordie :)

and i loved ur poem Pratik it was sad but cute :hug2:

pratik732006
10-18-2008, 15:57:51
tnx everyone for the comments on the poem :)

Clank
10-18-2008, 15:59:18
Yeah yours was really good Pratik :) Impressive

pratik732006
10-18-2008, 16:09:17
tnx again geordie

Emo234
10-18-2008, 16:41:44
Wow :appl: Great poems EVERYONE :) I'm really proud to have alot of poets as my friends :D ;D

Clank
10-18-2008, 16:43:49
Thanks !! :)

Emo234
10-18-2008, 16:46:54
Ur welcome:D I have one to post but I forgot it right now.When I get the book I wrote it in I will post it :D

LovelyUndeadVam
10-23-2008, 06:37:24
hehehe. i have a poem for craziness. :P

Crazy?
Hey, I was crazy once.
The locked me in a really white room.
Oh, my, it was so clean!
I recall people calling it the looney bin.
Then they tied my arms behind my back,
and I thought that it was a game.
Oh, my, I love games!
Then I felt a poke on my arm and fell asleep.
I couldn't wake up, and it drove me crazy!
Crazy?
Hey, I was crazy once...

EscapeGirl
10-23-2008, 06:40:50
LOL! :haha: I love it! :D :appl:

LovelyUndeadVam
10-23-2008, 06:42:48
doesn't it (kinda) fit in with us? i mean, we don't really have needles buuuttt....:P i think we could afford some straight jackets over here! especially for me! :haha: thank you. :hug2:

EscapeGirl
10-23-2008, 06:44:38
Yes, it DEFINITELY does!!! :haha: :crazy: :hug2:

Btw, did you see RBS's rhyme? :haha:

LovelyUndeadVam
10-23-2008, 06:45:53
hahahaha. yes i did. i thought that it was a good rap type thing. :P

EDIT: i wrote another one. :) my favorite song inspired me on this one. it's like a hate poem for someone that i can't stand.

Think hard.
Think HARDER.
Open your mouth.
Close it again.
Nothing to say.
Nothing to think.
Can't stand you.
Can't FREAKING stand you.
Your mouth opens,
hateful words come out.
Names.
Go ahead.
I'm used to the disappointment.
It's like a broken record for me.
Disappoint me.
Do it.
I dare you.

Emo234
11-02-2008, 03:39:22
Hahaha I luv the crazy poem lol.:haha: :appl:

Isaiah
11-09-2008, 00:05:47
I wish for a christmas so light and so bright.
Snowy flakes that are filled with delight.
As the sun comes down on this christmas eve,
we wait to see what Jake pulls out of his sleeve.

Its Christmas, its christmas, thats finally here,
We let out a great holiday cheer!
Friends, Family, And Gods Birthday will....

Brighten our lives, brighten our lives,
Christmas fellings will Brighten our lives.
Brighten our lives!

LovelyUndeadVam
11-09-2008, 00:09:10
thank you emo. :D

i like the poem Isaiah!

Chocbubbles
11-09-2008, 11:16:37
like the poem Isaiah :)

Emo234
11-09-2008, 17:08:07
Wow great poem very christmsly :appl:

Isaiah
11-09-2008, 17:33:10
I love this
http://www.derok.net/videos/medicine/dr-evil-just-the-two-of-us

That vidoe is so funny and since it rimes and it is music i thought it would fit here

ForeverJoseph
11-26-2008, 01:05:32
i haer wat they say
wat they say about me
they think i dont
i kno who i am
they dont kno
im me
the guy who doesnt talk
the one whos weird
thats wat they say
people ask why i dont care
i dont care cuz
i am who i am
and im not changing for them
the people who talk about people
the people who dont care who u r
but wat u look like

EscapeGirl
11-26-2008, 10:13:40
That's a good poem, Party. :) I like it. Shows your strength. Good for you. :hug2: :)

ShiningStar
11-26-2008, 16:13:11
Great poems everyone!!

ForeverJoseph
11-26-2008, 17:09:27
thanx

Emo234
11-26-2008, 19:52:37
Wow party I luv it simply cuz it hits so close to home with me too.Great job.Stay strong,stay who u r!!!!!!!!!!!

Clank
11-26-2008, 20:16:05
OK I am gonna right a poem about how i am feeling :( And it is quite upsetting, It is all wrote by me and i have not copied it from anywhere. Please give comments, i spent a long time on it

I put a smile on my face.
Fake, Its a mask.
I laugh.
Fake, Its a lie.
Say what you mean.
Mean what you say.
Be who you are
Who you are. Be.
Am i lying.
Am i Fake.
Is it me that does this.
Not me. Fake.
Lose the noise and listen to the echoes.
Hear the words and listen to the lies.
Is it me.
Fake.
Me.
Am i real?
Do i know where to stand.
Do i have a place.
I will be who i am
I will say what i would say when i am speaking
I will stand up when i would stand when standing
I will hear what i want to hear when i am hearing
I will feel when i want to when i am feeling
I will live when i want when i am who i want to be
I will laugh when i want to laugh when i am laughing
I put a smile on my face.
Fake its a mask.
Fake. Am i?
Who do i want to be when i want to be someone.
What do i want to smile at when i smile.
Is there a reason to smile.
Is there a reason to live
Is there a reason to be.
Is there.
A reason.
To be me.
Fake.
Am I?

ForeverJoseph
11-26-2008, 21:11:17
that my freind was good very deep

Clank
11-26-2008, 21:18:24
Thanks Party i liked urs on the previous page and good for you ;) I also have some more near the start on post #190 and i think on #114 and more near the start. (they are much stronger and deeper than this one) And thankyou for your comments

ForeverJoseph
11-26-2008, 21:25:50
thank you 2 and ill chek the others out to

ShiningStar
11-26-2008, 21:26:31
That was really good Geo! :hug2: and sorry your sad!:(

Clank
11-28-2008, 16:04:49
Well I am happy now and thanks ;)

Emo234
12-11-2008, 18:29:35
Wow really good Clank.I hope u figure it all out ;) :hug2: :hug2: :hug2: :hug2:

Clank
12-11-2008, 18:50:41
No I am cool, Now, that was like two weeks ago :) And you called me clank :o LOL, It still feels weird :)

LovelyUndeadVam
12-16-2008, 07:00:22
CHRISTMAS POEM!

Give me life,
give me hope,
give me something to look forward to.
I want a pony,
I want a doll,
I want a coloring book,
Santa, oh Santa.
I've been good this year,
really, I have.
I've been so good this year.
A puppy would be nice,
or maybe a shiny new bike?
What would be greatest for me?
As I wake in the morning,
and run to the tree to see five,
maybe six more presents than before,
I squeal with anticipation.
I look in the first box.
Socks?
Second box.
Shirts?
Third box.
Not what I wanted.
Fourth?
Not what I wanted...
Fifth??
I sniffle as I see something,
yet again,
that I didn't want.
As I pick up the sixth box,
a rumbling caught my attention.
What was in this one?
I open it and out comes a puppy,
golden with pretty scotch eyes,
and a big red bow hung loosely 'round
its neck.
I squeal with the anticipation
that I had before.
What a Christmas!
A puppy,
and a ton of new clothes!

ForeverJoseph
12-18-2008, 02:41:14
one more word be4 i say goodbye
one last breath together
its not hard to say
yet it is
as i fumble for the words
you sit and listen
waiting for
what i dont have
but the exact opposite
its over
or is it?
the tears come to her eyes
as i hold mine back
punching myself in the stomach doesnt cut it anymore
i have to
thats wat a tell myself
as we go our seperate ways
one more word be4 i say goodbye
one more breath together

Emo234
01-01-2009, 19:06:45
Wow I really like it party :appl: It kinda explains new moon when edward leaves lol.I really like it tho.

1momomo124
01-02-2009, 04:41:46
mine doesn't rhyme because i can't make things rhyme :)

Good and Bad

We know what is good
We know what is bad
But do we?
No
we have different visions different views
we are no the same
you have your own belief
respect other people's views,visions,and beliefs
if you don't no one will respect yours

Justeazy
01-25-2009, 07:07:21
FIRST off, I didn't read EVERY thing posted so far, but most all of what I DID read was good, so :appl: to all!

Well... this isn't really a poem, but a song.
I just didn't feel like making a new topic, since this one will do just fine!


This is a song I just wrote for certain reasons...

"
Got your first car,
know what you gotta do.
Show those other punks
that you got it too!
Win your first race,
win your next, win your last.
You win every race,
and you always have a blast!

You're a racer.
They'll put you to the test,
You're a racer.
but you'll show them you're the best!
Wallet's getting heavy
as you rise to the top.
Face is getting known
as the one they can't stop.
You're a racer.
Live your life by day,
You're a racer.
always come back to play!

Put it in drive
and count to three.
Step on the gas
and pick up speed.
Take a right around this corner,
left on the next one.
You beat all the rest,
'kuz you're number one!

You're a racer.
You're the best there'll ever be,
You're a racer.
they should call you speedy-magee!
Wallet's getting heavy
as you rise to the top.
Face is getting known
as the one they can't stop.
You're a racer.
Live your life by day,
You're a racer.
always come back to play!

Pick up the keys
and run out the door.
Not gonna stop
'til you win one more!
You've beaten them all,
it's just a game to you now.
Don't wanna stop
'til they stop saying "wow"

You're a racer.
You're the best there ever was,
You're a racer.
You're still all the buzz!
Wallet's getting heavy
as you rise to the top.
Face is getting known
as the one they can't stop.
You're a racer.
Live your life by day,
You're a racer.
always come back to play!

Tires don't spin,
but your name lives on.
Don't race anymore,
But your spirit's not gone.
Never lost a race,
and you never backed down.
But the time has finally come
for you to pass on your crown.

He's a racer.
Just starting in your game,
He's a racer.
But he'll live up to your name!
Wallet's getting heavy
as he rises to the top.
Face is getting known
as the one they can't stop.
He's a racer.
Lives his life by day,
He's a racer.
always come back to play!

(optional stanza)
After so long,
it's time to say good-bye.
As all good parents know,
you have to let your baby fly.
You've raised him well,
He'll go far, you will see.
He'll take your name
and make his own legacy!
"

This song is copyright (c) 2009 Justin Castillo; All Rights Reserved


Tell me what you think.

Also, should the name be "You're a racer" or "Pass on your crown"?

Chocbubbles
01-25-2009, 07:26:39
wow, that's really cool :)
looks like a good song

hmmm...i'd choose "pass on your crown" it sounds good to me :)

binkygg
01-25-2009, 13:18:08
i have a limerick i made in school

There was once a duchess from France
Who learned how to gracefully dance
She was good for a while,
But tripped on a tile
So she lost her gigantic chance!

LovelyUndeadVam
01-25-2009, 21:33:08
Hey everyone, :) I know it seems like I was gone for a while, but hey, here I am, with a poem! :D:D

Memories
I love my life as much as the next person.
I love my parents,
my friends,
all the happy times spent together.
Another time,
another place,
a memory not soon forgotten.
But as time goes on,
we unfortunately do forget,
even if we want to remember.
All the happy times spent together,
wasted on a memory.


It's kind of sad, but I wrote it for school. :P

1momomo124
01-25-2009, 22:05:39
good job Lovely! :appl: better then mine ;)

Emo234
02-08-2009, 19:58:01
Ok so I have a poem I wrote.I guess u could say for valentines day.It's really corny do u all want to read it anyway??????


Let me know and I'll post or not post it ;)

Hitman
02-08-2009, 20:11:29
Why wouldn't we want to read it Emo?
Personally, I'd love to! :D

Lumpy Jay
02-08-2009, 20:15:23
if its a valentines poem the cornier the better so lets hear it :)

EscapeGirl
02-09-2009, 00:40:37
Like Lumpy Jay says, for Valentine's Day, the cornier, the better. Please share it! :D

Emo234
02-13-2009, 23:29:28
Ok well glad u guys and girls want to read it.It's called butterflies.


Butterflies,Ah butterflies!
How I wish it never dies.
That sweet hypnotic sensation.
The pace at which my heart insist's on racin'
How I love it so.
Just to let the current flow
Oh to see you everyday.
I wish it were that way.
How is this rush possible?
Oh what am I saying it's UNSTOPPABLE!!!!!!
I hope you feel the same.
Or is it my heart just playing games.
Butterflies,Ah butterflies!



Hope u all like it :D

Lumpy Jay
02-14-2009, 14:42:11
Emo i think its great and NOT corny at all.

Happy Valentines everyone ;)

Emo234
02-14-2009, 20:13:34
Oh thnx glad u liked it. :)

ForeverJoseph
03-20-2009, 02:07:42
as if the world stops turning everthing stops and i get to think i think of the people i think of the places i think of life and its ups ad downs ipick up the knife and stare i see me looking at myself. the disgusting image of me. but i put it down knowing the horrors of guilt. i cant do that to them.i walk a way wearing my fake smile.

i came up with that on a rainy day.


more will be coming soon.

Clank
03-23-2009, 16:34:25
Heres a one i just made up, to sum up my life in the past 4 days :(

Its Not what they say
Its the Laughing
Its the hardest sound to hear when your on the other side
Its like a siren that never stops spinning
Its like you have a pain in your body
So long my friend
Its harder than words to get through that noise
Its harder than a rock being aimed at you
Its harder than the toughest of toothaches
Its harder than your mind can take
Because you cant stop it
Its making your emotions grow
Its making you hide behind jovial fear
Its harder to realise that its happening to you
However its all my fault
Its why i don’t wanna fight it
Its why i don’t want to step out and grip
Because its harder that way to deal with it
Its Not what they do, Its what they mean
How does it end.

EscapeGirl
03-24-2009, 00:44:59
as if the world stops turning everthing stops and i get to think i think of the people i think of the places i think of life and its ups ad downs ipick up the knife and stare i see me looking at myself. the disgusting image of me. but i put it down knowing the horrors of guilt. i cant do that to them.i walk a way wearing my fake smile.

i came up with that on a rainy day.


more will be coming soon.

This is so sad. :wht: And worrisome. :S If you ever need to talk, please know I'm only a PM away, Party. Please, if you ever need to talk...just let me know. :hug2::hug2::hug2: In the meantime, keep writing if it makes you feel better and helps get your feelings out. :hug2: You're a nice guy, and I only hope to see happier poems to reflect a happier you in the future. :hug2:


Heres a one i just made up, to sum up my life in the past 4 days :(

Its Not what they say
Its the Laughing
Its the hardest sound to hear when your on the other side
Its like a siren that never stops spinning
Its like you have a pain in your body
So long my friend
Its harder than words to get through that noise
Its harder than a rock being aimed at you
Its harder than the toughest of toothaches
Its harder than your mind can take
Because you cant stop it
Its making your emotions grow
Its making you hide behind jovial fear
Its harder to realise that its happening to you
However its all my fault
Its why i don’t wanna fight it
Its why i don’t want to step out and grip
Because its harder that way to deal with it
Its Not what they do, Its what they mean
How does it end.

Oh, Clank. :( The same goes for you, you know. If you need to vent, or get anything off your chest, you know how to reach me. :hug2::hug2::hug2: I've been there, and I think there are many who know how you feel. I hope things look up for you. But that's a good poem. :) You're a cool guy. :hug2::hug2: Keep that chin up. :)

LovelyUndeadVam
03-24-2009, 01:43:03
Here's one that I made up in my sleep. :P

Entangled in the darkness
Where no stricken human eye
Could ever hope to find an escaping path
Trapped in a never ending oblivion
And yet peaceful state of mind

Clank
03-24-2009, 17:12:59
This is so sad. :wht: And worrisome. :S If you ever need to talk, please know I'm only a PM away, Party. Please, if you ever need to talk...just let me know. :hug2::hug2::hug2: In the meantime, keep writing if it makes you feel better and helps get your feelings out. :hug2: You're a nice guy, and I only hope to see happier poems to reflect a happier you in the future. :hug2:



Oh, Clank. :( The same goes for you, you know. If you need to vent, or get anything off your chest, you know how to reach me. :hug2::hug2::hug2: I've been there, and I think there are many who know how you feel. I hope things look up for you. But that's a good poem. :) You're a cool guy. :hug2::hug2: Keep that chin up. :)

Ahh Thanks Escape!!!, Well things are already looking up, I had a bad week last week that ok, But thanks anyway :hug2: Thanks :hug2:


Here's one that I made up in my sleep. :P

Entangled in the darkness
Where no stricken human eye
Could ever hope to find an escaping path
Trapped in a never ending oblivion
And yet peaceful state of mind


Ahhh, Yeah its nice :) I like the simplicity :D

EscapeGirl
03-24-2009, 20:10:04
Here's one that I made up in my sleep. :P

Entangled in the darkness
Where no stricken human eye
Could ever hope to find an escaping path
Trapped in a never ending oblivion
And yet peaceful state of mind

I like it! Great job! :hug2:

Frantic Freddie
03-25-2009, 00:20:59
Little Miss Muffet
Sat on a tuffet
Eating her curds & whey
Along came a spider
That decided to bite her
And she died the very next day

Carmit
03-25-2009, 00:51:18
lolz XD
i can never come up with words that sound good togther
my brothers EMO GEROGE sounds better that my shoelace buter kid

ForeverJoseph
04-15-2009, 00:55:25
i never thought it would be this bad crossing the street isnt satisfying me. i thought about taking the long road. i get close. the path is there. but as i turn i remember her face. i cant. i turn back.just crossing the street. dont know where im going. but where ever it is, she'll be there every step of the way.
^END OF THAT ONE ^

this knife has to be alive. controlling me with its edge. i pressit to the skin and let loose.everything goes away. its just me and the blood. dripping. pouring. i love it. yet i hate it. the way it stares at me. telling me something in a foreign language. the mixed feelings go away. and theres nothing but guilt. then i fall asleep. forgetting the nightmare. until i wake up and look down. the scars. stinging. laughing. i cover them up and act like nothing happened. but i kno it did.the scars wont let me forget. neither will the knife.and i kno ill be seeing them both again. reliving the night mare. the guilt. the pain.

Emo234
04-15-2009, 17:47:58
OMG PLZ TELL ME U DON'T HURT URSLEF???????? That's not gonna help party there are other ways out :)Like I always say if u need to talk that I'm here and not going anywhere :) :hug2: :hug2: :hug2:

ForeverJoseph
04-16-2009, 01:54:26
ive just been going thru some rough times. not gonna go into that becaus thats really not something i openly share.

Emo234
04-16-2009, 17:25:12
Ummmmm.....ok well I'm still always here lol.I got ur back if u need someone to vent to :) I know the world can be a dark and evil place,but there is good in it u just have to find it :D

ForeverJoseph
04-16-2009, 23:26:06
Thanx