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    Bullets, a new book from geordieboy

    Ok heres a new book from me, But this time it is completely a new story about heroes, villians, lies and lots of action. It will also be much much longer then my previous one, the phantoms.

    At the end of each chapter i would be really grateful if you could post comments and ideas for the next chapter.

    Please dont lie and be honest, give constructive criticism
    If you have any queries, feel free to ask.

    The new story is called "Bullets".



    WARNING- This book will definitely not be suitable for young readers.

    Here is the link to the site you can view the story on, because it is not suitable for younger members

    http://bulletsstory.sosblog.com/index.htm
    Last edited by Clank; 01-30-2009, 16:08:36. Reason: new name
    New York!
    Concrete jungle where dreams are made of,
    There's nothing you can’t do,
    Now you're in New York!
    These streets will make you feel brand new,
    These lights will inspire you,
    Let's hear it for New York, New York, New York

    JAY Z AND ALICIA KEYS - EMPIRE STATE OF MIND CLICK HERE
    Tags: action, awesomeness, book, bullets, characters, geordieboy
  • #2
    Will all people who have read the story please post the comments on this thread instead of posting them on the site the story is being posted on please

    http://bulletsstory.sosblog.com/index.htm

    Direct link to chapter 1:
    http://bulletsstory.sosblog.com/The-...er-1-b1-p2.htm
    Last edited by Mistery; 10-20-2008, 20:37:04. Reason: Added direct link to chapter 1
    New York!
    Concrete jungle where dreams are made of,
    There's nothing you can’t do,
    Now you're in New York!
    These streets will make you feel brand new,
    These lights will inspire you,
    Let's hear it for New York, New York, New York

    JAY Z AND ALICIA KEYS - EMPIRE STATE OF MIND CLICK HERE

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    • #3
      just read the first chapter. it was really good. very descriptive. i should probably mention that you are spelling "realize" as "realise". thought you should know. anyways. other than that, very well done on that one!
      GH Family (possibly the coolest )
      Brother: ~GH Dog~
      Cousins: Chocbubbles, Animal Dragon, Yoshifan19, Emo234, 2 Tails, funja
      (highlight the text, there's someone hiding. )
      Ghost Robot Cousin: Clank

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      • #4
        Realize and realise are both correct
        In British English both forms exist, while in American English only "realize" is used.

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        • #5
          ! really? oh i didn't even know that! wow, i just learned something. it's good either way. i like it.
          GH Family (possibly the coolest )
          Brother: ~GH Dog~
          Cousins: Chocbubbles, Animal Dragon, Yoshifan19, Emo234, 2 Tails, funja
          (highlight the text, there's someone hiding. )
          Ghost Robot Cousin: Clank

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          • #6
            Thanks LovelyUndeadVam for the comments and Mistery for the correction.

            Here it actually doesnt matter which way you spell it but most use realise..
            New York!
            Concrete jungle where dreams are made of,
            There's nothing you can’t do,
            Now you're in New York!
            These streets will make you feel brand new,
            These lights will inspire you,
            Let's hear it for New York, New York, New York

            JAY Z AND ALICIA KEYS - EMPIRE STATE OF MIND CLICK HERE

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            • #7
              Cool!
              I liked it, it is kinda confusing...

              but...

              WHEN YOU GONNA ADD MORE?!?!
              READ
              >>CLICK>>sigpic<<CLICK<<
              It'll SHOCK you!
              Post anything and everything about Short Circuit HERE!

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              • #8
                nice story, can't wait to read more!

                *~The Shining Star of GH~~*
                The riddlers gang: Vivi, Sumitra, Hunter, Bizarrochick, Monkey, Archaicdome, and Teeodd!
                June 15th is fundayja day! July 9th is Teeodd day! July 10th is Sumitra day! July 11th is Shining day! September 13th is Crazy day! September 18th is Robot day! October 13th is Party 4 Ever day! March 15th is Archaicdome day!

                *~a proud Mommy to be~*

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                • #9
                  Thanks Well i think the site went down for about two weeks so i forgot about it, i already wrote two chapters but i forgot, so they will be up very
                  shortly

                  Ok direct link to chapter 2
                  http://bulletsstory.sosblog.com/The-first-blog-b1.htm
                  New York!
                  Concrete jungle where dreams are made of,
                  There's nothing you can’t do,
                  Now you're in New York!
                  These streets will make you feel brand new,
                  These lights will inspire you,
                  Let's hear it for New York, New York, New York

                  JAY Z AND ALICIA KEYS - EMPIRE STATE OF MIND CLICK HERE

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                  • #10
                    a gh-WHAT?!?

                    Also, was that last part (a knife in the back) a metaphor or a description?
                    READ
                    >>CLICK>>sigpic<<CLICK<<
                    It'll SHOCK you!
                    Post anything and everything about Short Circuit HERE!

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                    • #11
                      Ok Well basically i am dead
                      New York!
                      Concrete jungle where dreams are made of,
                      There's nothing you can’t do,
                      Now you're in New York!
                      These streets will make you feel brand new,
                      These lights will inspire you,
                      Let's hear it for New York, New York, New York

                      JAY Z AND ALICIA KEYS - EMPIRE STATE OF MIND CLICK HERE

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                      • #12
                        Hi Clank

                        Read through your first two chapters. The were well written and did hold the reader's attention. Nice work. Now waiting for chapter 3
                        sigpic

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                        • #13
                          omg. OMGOMGOMG. You gotta hurry with the next chapter! I can't wait to read it!
                          GH Family (possibly the coolest )
                          Brother: ~GH Dog~
                          Cousins: Chocbubbles, Animal Dragon, Yoshifan19, Emo234, 2 Tails, funja
                          (highlight the text, there's someone hiding. )
                          Ghost Robot Cousin: Clank

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                          • #14
                            Can't wait for more chapters!

                            *~The Shining Star of GH~~*
                            The riddlers gang: Vivi, Sumitra, Hunter, Bizarrochick, Monkey, Archaicdome, and Teeodd!
                            June 15th is fundayja day! July 9th is Teeodd day! July 10th is Sumitra day! July 11th is Shining day! September 13th is Crazy day! September 18th is Robot day! October 13th is Party 4 Ever day! March 15th is Archaicdome day!

                            *~a proud Mommy to be~*

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                            • #15
                              Thanks for the comments, one coming up tomorrow keep checking
                              New York!
                              Concrete jungle where dreams are made of,
                              There's nothing you can’t do,
                              Now you're in New York!
                              These streets will make you feel brand new,
                              These lights will inspire you,
                              Let's hear it for New York, New York, New York

                              JAY Z AND ALICIA KEYS - EMPIRE STATE OF MIND CLICK HERE

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